I have filmed my whole piece again. I think this was a wise move. I new what I was doing this time, I new how it could be improved a lot and by how. I set up the paper in my living room with various high wattage lamps placed around me, I played around with the lighting quite a lot until I got this very blue white colour. It looks very dark but when lightened up digitally it has a fantastic blue white....
Before:
After: This is the perfect white for what I want. I decided to stick with the difference in paper (for the origami squares and the backdrop - It ended up being way to similar)
I made all my changes that I wanted. Here is one of the beginning edits:
I set up white paper taped high on a white board and folding over 2 tables. The studio lights pointed to the paper. One tripod over the top of me sitting at the table and one on a tripod on wheels behind me (I have come to the conclusion that moving round the back of me will be the best way of switching the paper to the white Aquapax). One of the lights blew up half way through filming - so this is one major problem!
I have edited the footage to be very fast (sped up by nearly 400%) and with different cuts (Not what I originally thought, it just works so much better - Its to slow and boring the way I originally intended)
I have changed the music to a piano piece, very delicate and pretty.
Here is the cut I showed to Neil in Crit...
Before I showed it to him I already didn't like it. I really like my idea but it just hasn't turned out how I imagined at all...
My feedback to myself from this cut:
Too dark
Colours need to be crisper/whiter
Paper origami needs to be the same as the backdrop
Paint drops need to be a lot brighter to make masking easier
I don't like the angle of the hands - they need to be more head on
My sleeve keeps moving up and down!
Needs to be choppier - More close ups etc
Neil and Sarah still really like my idea and they kind of like the way it looked but suggested some changes:
Change Aquapax logo to full one
Change capital letters to lowercase
Cut down to nearer 30 seconds
Make the origami clearer of what it is so they look like i'm making completely different things
Maybe leave the origami I leave to one side on screen, rather than take it off
Speed the pan round my back up a lot faster
Maybe be wearing Aquapax colours (I didn't do this in the first place as I wasn't going to be in it on the day!)
Make all the colour in the different cuts similar - its too jumpy at the moment.
I am really disappointed with my video so far. I still really like my idea but it's just not looking how I want it too. I think I'm going to have to take this as a practice and shoot again. I was going to maybe just shoot parts again (like close ups of fingers creasing paper etc) but realistically to make me happy with it I think I need to do it all again... I have learnt a lot from filming this first version which will help me so much to perfect it.
So... I am going to borrow the digital camera from college and over half term film the whole thing again. What I am going to do differently:
Cut the origami squares from the same paper as the backdrop
Wear a pale blue dress
Buy some daylight blue lightbulbs and arrange as many house lamps as possible around me - PERFECT the lighting before any filming!
Shoot the scene of making origami 2 or 3 times from different angles, to make editing the cuts faster and choppier
Use a brighter paint for pouring onto the white Aquapax (Super bright orange?)
Make sure the camera is picking up the paint without so many shadows
Take a still of an Aquapax in the same scene as the White Aquapax on the exact same spot (to mask the paint to packaging)
My idea for the Aquapax QR code is to focus on the paper aspect. I like the idea of Aquapax being so pure and natural and made with paper. I want it to be all white white white, crisp and clean. My idea is using Origami to create other natural things such as birds and flowers and then going on to create an Aquapax out of paper - Which will then get 'hydrated' to reveal the actual Aquapax packaging.
Below is my animatic for my Aquapax video...
So the idea is...
2 hands on white backdrop/table
Right hand goes to bring a square of white paper on screen
Hands make a paper swan
Left hand takes swan off screen
Right hand brings new paper
Hands make a paper flower
Left hand takes flower off screen
Right hand brings new paper
Hands start to make a bottle
Bottle is replaced with a white Aquapax
Hands go off screen
Green paint is poured over the Aquapax (Which will be masked to Aquapax actual painting)
Logo appears
Text appears
End
After showing my storyboards and animatic to Neil I feel quite confident to go ahead with my idea. He really liked the general idea of the film, he just said it really depends on the execution of it - which it really does! He also said to change the wording at the end to - 'One of the purest mineral waters on Earth' - 'A pure thirst for the environment'
After:
This is the perfect white for what I want.